check out my lyrics tell me What U Think?
Dat ni99a Tone my name ring bells frum evry 973 block to pennitentary jail cells yung and doin it big adress me as a man cus I aint ur mthfkin kid come again wit tha bull5hit get wet u and yo hole mthfkin click they call us dirty jerzy cus ni99as is grimy don’t worry I got all my dirty jerzy ni99az bhind me Rep 4 yo block ni99a keep it real iller then 99.9 percent of these dudes wit a deal niggas will point 1 in yo dome im tellin ya don’t come thru tha block alone, u get stripped naked sayin fuc i shoulda listen to TONE ova here we don’t get it hyphy or crunk check niggas like nikes and stuff bodies in trunks I aint snappin my fingaz or leanin and rockin dirty jerz niggas is clappin squeziin triggas beamin and cockin niggas talkin bout they whips they B!tch and they bling when they dont own half them mthfkin thangz I don’t feel tha need to lie or brag I could be bummy wit a wifebeater on and u still couldnt match my swag
Dean Cortez answers:
I like it. You really have to work on your spelling and presentation, though, because people aren’t going to want to read a big run-on mess, and it’s harder to spot the rhyme that way too. I’d say rework it, you don’t have to cut the slang but fix spelling of things like every, penitentiary, young, address, ain’t, Jersey, I’m, and so on, it will be taken more seriously that way. It flows nice at the beginning and end but falls apart a little in the middle. Nice work, though
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